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i.

This key to incandescence
is prone to
melting
at the inconvenient midnights.

Every swath of cotton that
swallows blanketed
secrets
could be the next to fly.

I can’t see which way
is the one to Kelowna
when the nearest street signs
are covered in twilit moss and
the landmark here is a memory.

ii.

It’s not the wilting
watercress
in the overflowing
river
that will house a
sliver
of what we thought last month.

Peculiar sabres line the walkways here,
point down,
hilt up,
and edges keen as silk.
What is rust when spin is imminent?

iii.

These nights of fondling
ice
can’t be more
emphatic
without putting Monaco to rest.

A gyroscope of sentiment,
or a hope in a blender,
would be the appropriate metaphor here --
©2007-2009 ~LaPersonneQuiPense
:iconlapersonnequipense:

Author's Comments

Man, so this is my first submission in forever. Wow. I promise there will be a lot more come April, but I have to get through this week first ^^

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:iconmegandurnford:
i like iii. the best because it has the best imagery :) im excited to see what else you put up :heart:

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baby, seasons change, people dont
:iconleahbatstone-xo:
i don't understand it .. but i have a mind that only works on simple things , so maybe thats why. it sounds pretty though :)

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live like there will be no tomorrow
:iconmegandurnford:
leah leah leahh :P

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baby, seasons change, people dont
:iconmyseity:
I like the sabre imagery :P but of course. It's me.
This seems like the beginning of a deviation (ha, ha, I am so witty) away from your usual style...I shall wait with interest to see what else you come up with.

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To live is so startling it leaves little time for anything else. -Emily Dickinson
:iconlapersonnequipense:
Haha, guess what I was thinking about for that stanza ^^

Yeah, I was trying for a more... erm... cryptic (?) style and it dang near killed me. I like concrete things whose meanings are apparent =/ But those aren't nearly as much fun to read/think about, hmm? =)

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:iconthelemaj:
Impressive, but it needs a few more lines at the end, as it sort of ends abruptly. Captivating, though.

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The fiery windowsills of a setting sun.

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